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73.The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

73.The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given two maps illustrate
a
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apply
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data about the
park
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 over the
20 years
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20-year
 period between 1980 and 2000.
Overall
Linking Words
, the main
area
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 of
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park
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the park
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in
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apply
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which
consist
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consists
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 of gardening surroundings replaced with activity areas
such
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 as play
ground
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playground
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 and
barbecu
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barbecue
 in 2000.
Moreover
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, the main 2 gates of the
park
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 developed On the one hand,
before
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20 years, the north-east of the
park
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 experienced only trees
while
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 it added new
caffetarial
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cafeteria
 equipment
such
Linking Words
 as chairs, desks and barbecue in 2000. In
adddition
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addition
 to
this
Linking Words
, the main part of
folwer
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the folwer
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area
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in
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which
located
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is located
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the
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in the
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 south-east of the
park
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 rearranged with the
play ground
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playground
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.
On the other hand
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, the west
area
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 of the
park
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which
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where
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restal
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rental
 space had been investigated
new
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with new
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 benches.
Following
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
, the roads of
main
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the main
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 territorial
area
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 of the
park
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rearranged
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were rearranged
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 with 2 new
pathes
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paths
 in 2002

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pond
  • northwest corner
  • large central open area
  • residential areas
  • community-oriented space
  • playground
  • eastern border
  • parking lot
  • convenience
  • commercial zone
  • amenities
  • walking path
  • encircles
  • joggers
  • accessible
  • entrances
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