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The plans below ilustrate the map of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010.

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First of all, the most
viseble
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visible
 difference between the first floor of the
museum
 in 1990 and in 2010 is that some new buildings have been added.
For example
,
instead
 of five distinct locations, there are seven and there is
also
 a lift added. Second of all, the statue
which
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apply
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was located near the stairs of the first floor in 1990, after 2010
it s
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its
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 position
has been
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was
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 changed, so the statue could be placed in the center. Another thing is that the entrance has been widened. Third of all, the eastern part of the territory has seen the largest number of changes,
such
 as the construction of the
Children s
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children's
 interactive zone and Poster display area that has replaced the Archaeology gallery. The position and size of the stairs,
Museum
 office and Natural history room
has
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have
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 remained the same since the
last
 century. The layout of the ground floor of the
museum
 analyzed in
this
 essay suffered several alterations
beteen
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between
 1990 and 2010. In spite of the fact that the plan was modified, the
museum
 developed in a
segnificant
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significant
 way.
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task achievement
Ensure the introduction provides a clear overview of the changes in the maps.
coherence and cohesion
The body paragraphs should be clearly separated and each should cover a distinct aspect of the changes.
task achievement
Offer specific examples to illustrate the changes mentioned, ensuring they are explicitly linked to the map provided.
coherence and cohesion
In the conclusion, summarize the key changes succinctly and reflect on the overall trend rather than repeating details.
language
Pay attention to spelling (e.g., 'visible', not 'viseble') and grammar to maintain academic formality and accuracy.

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