The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps below illustrate the changes that took place in the
village
of Stokeford
from 1930 to 2010.
Overall
, the village
of Stokeford
underwent significant development and modernization over the 80-year period, with new residential and educational facilities replacing the old agricultural and commercial ones.
In 1930, the village
of Stokeford
consisted of a few houses and shops on the east side of the River Stoke, which was crossed by a bridge. There was also
a post office and a primary school near the bridge. On the west side of the river, there was a large area of farmland.
By 2010, the village
of Stokeford
had changed considerably. The farmland had been replaced by a housing estate, which extended to the west. The shops had been removed and new houses and roads had been built on the east side of the river. The primary school had been enlarged and a retirement home had been constructed on the former site of the gardens and the large house. The only features that had not changed were the post office and the bridge.Submitted by weezel on
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