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some believe that students should learn a language very early in school while others think these subjects should be taught later. discuss both side and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt these days that learning a new
language
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 affects our life and increase cultural knowledge In
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 contemporary society some people believe that
students
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 need to learn a maximum
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 languages early in
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 other believe that learning a new
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 for
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 late in
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. in
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 essay, I am going to discuss benefits and drawbacks and draw my own opinion. In terms of the positive side
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 learning a
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 early in
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 affect their life, especially their careers learn a
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 when they are younger they understand it quickly and effectively easily. The main reason given to support
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 claim is that younger
students
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 they able to understand easily and effectively and do not need to teach them hardly younger
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 focus on their education and increase their
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.to illustrate, when I was a child I learned three languages
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, there are articles that 60% of younger
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 can speak over three languages nowadays I see younger fluence in species of
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.
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, younger
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 who have a
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 will have a perfect career in the future to communicate with other country compared to those who have been learning late in
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 which affect their career and communication with other countries. In conclusion,
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 nowadays learn a
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 so delayed make an effort to their jobs, in my opinion, the best way to teach younger
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 a
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 early is to gain
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 skills.
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task achievement
Ensure your essay maintains focus on the question throughout and directly addresses both sides of the issue, as well as clearly stating your own opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay should have a logical structure with clear paragraphs. A clear introduction, well-defined body paragraphs, and a concluding paragraph are essential.
task achievement
Support your main points with specific examples. Avoid general statements and strive to include details that directly support your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Work on sentence structure and punctuation to ensure clarity and readability. Complex sentences and varied vocabulary will also contribute to a higher score.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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