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Tourism generates revenue therefore it should be promoted discuss the statement and give solutions .

#tourism #revenue
The tourism industry plays a vital role in today`s world where people strive to recreate in various places to look for cultures with multiple patterns and registers. The logic behind my idea in
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aspects which have been surveyed comprehensively. the most tangible issue would be relevant to the long-term planning of the government to contribute their people utilizing different occupations to pave all ways
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the tourists to meet all their needs. Declining the manipulation of budgets in public areas and
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 people grab the attention of different walks from all around the world
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coherence cohesion
You should clearly outline your main points in the introduction, ensuring that each subsequent paragraph expands upon these points in a structured manner.
coherence cohesion
End your essay with a conclusion that summarizes your main points and relates them back to the prompt, creating a clear structure from introduction to conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Each main point should be supported with relevant examples or explanations. Make sure to develop each idea fully before moving on to the next.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task, ensuring you discuss both the statement provided and offer clear solutions related to the prompt.
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Ideas presented should be clear, well thought-out, and comprehensively explored to adequately address the task.
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Use specific, relevant examples to support your positions and claims. Vague or general references weaken the impact of your argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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