The bar chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.

The bar chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five

 different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.
The provided bar chart illustrates alterations in average house prices across five distinct cities from 1990 to 2002, relative to the average prices in 1989. It is clear, that from 1990 to 1995 the average compared to 1989 the number has rather decreased, except in two
countries
,
However
, from 1996 to 2002 the situation is the opposite, as it has increased in all
countries
except one. If we focus on
this
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, on the first average until 1995, we have Tokio, and London with around –7,5% of
percentage
change from 1989 prices.
Then
New York
which
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obtains a
percentage
of –5% and
finally
we have 2
countries
who reached a positive
percentage
, 2% for Madrid and 2,5% for Frankfurt
on
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Germany.
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the following which
focus
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from
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1996 to 2002, we have just one negative
percentage
which
still
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with
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–5% and it is Tokio. After, there is London with
the
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higher average which
rise
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until
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10%,
then
we have 2
countries
who
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which
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have an equal
percentage
around 5% (New York and Madrid a bit lower 4%.
Lastly
, the German city
,
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decreased the
percentage
compared to the previous average and now obtains 2%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • real estate market
  • average house prices
  • economic factors
  • base year
  • significant increase/decrease
  • period of stability
  • peak and trough
  • real estate development
  • population growth
  • relative comparison
  • speculate
  • anomalies
  • timeframe
  • trend analysis
  • market dynamics
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