The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the amount of
internationally
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international
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tourists to three various
place
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places
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in a Europe region between the two years (1987 and 2007).
Overall
, it can be seen that the all areas where the
tourist
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tourists
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visited increased during the given period. In 1987, the coast area had
highest
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value and it was 40,000.
This
quantity decreased till 1992
then
peaked sharply from 1992 to 2007. The
mountains
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number of mountains
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visiting
had risen
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rose
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slightly
in
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from
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1997 to 1997
then
this
value remained the same throughout 5 years
subsequently
the
mountains
traveling
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travelling
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climbed tediously. There
was
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were
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just
only
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apply
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10,000
for
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apply
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the
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apply
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lakes
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lake
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visiting
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visits
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in 1987 and
this
value went up until 1997 after that
this
rate rocketed rapidly in 2002
then
the
lakes
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lake
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vacations
droped
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dropped
significantly from 2002 to 2007. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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the coastal and the
mountains
areas
shows
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show
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the
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apply
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soaring
while
the
lakes
visiting
depicts
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depict
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decline. The European travellers most
prefered
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preferred
the coast or
mountains
area
than
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to
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lakes
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words mountains, lakes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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