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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the top three
pineapple exporting
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pineapple-exporting
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 countries in the world
during
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between
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 2009 and 2019.
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 the pie chart provides information about the breakdown of the cost to customers of a single pineapple in 2019
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Overall
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, it is evident that
Country
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 A' was the highest exporter of pineapples in the year 2019,
whereas
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Country
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 B was the lowest exporter among all the nations. In the pie chart, distribution and retail had more than a third
percent
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per cent
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 in 2019. The bar graph, in 2009,
country
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 B had the highest distribution of nearly
about
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apply
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5 tone
metric
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metrics
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 in millions.
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, in 2019,
Country
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 A reached its peak at around 10 metric tons (in millions).
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,
Country
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 C hovered around 2 metric tons in millions in both years. Turning to the second picture, 35% of distribution and retail was by far the largest, which was seven times higher than the 5% of the producer sector. The lowest are the export costs, which are only 4%. The figures for the other four kinds of profit—taxes, international transport, and import licenses—were kept roughly in the range of 10% to 16%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • world pineapple exports
  • top three producing countries
  • 2009
  • 2019
  • breakdown
  • cost to the consumer
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
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