The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates
that
the survey of four causes Correct word choice
apply
if
people who move to another place.
Correct your spelling
of
Overall
, it can be seen that the
employment was the most popular reason Correct article usage
apply
of
people to go to another area, Change preposition
for
whereas
, the least reason was because of family or friends
and adventure
.
To begin
with, in 2000, getting a job was the essential cause of people moved
to Wrong verb form
moving
city
, it started Add an article
the city
roughly
60,000 Change preposition
at roughly
percentage
, Replace the word
per cent
then
it rose dramatically in
ten years ahead about 90,000, Change preposition
apply
although
it dipped slightly in
the end of the year roughly 88,000. Change the preposition
at
Whereas
,
studying was the second Remove the comma
apply
placed
, it jumped up all the entire years, which started approximately 25,000 to 88,000 in 2000 to 2015.
Replace the word
place
Furthermore
, the two last
reasons were due to
family or friends
and adventure
, while
the adventure
was the most
least percentage than Change the adjective
apply
friends
and adventure
. The adventure
was increasing stabilize
(10,000 to 11,000) for the entire years, Wrong verb form
increased stabilised
besides
family or friends
reason went up slowly where about 11,000 to 21,000 between 2000 and 2015.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words friends, adventure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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