The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
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graph depicts data about the intake of fish and various types of meat in four European
among
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1979 and 2004.
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, chicken is the largest type of meat that was consumed by European people in 2004. Meanwhile , people tend to eat fish in small
amount
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in the year
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2004. Having a close look
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the details, we can
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that
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European consumers
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to eat lamb
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approximately 100% in 1979 . So the year
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1979
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a fall
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in the percentage of consumption. On
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hand , people consumed fish , lamb , and beef in the same amount for the years of 1984 till1999.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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