In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In the future, every
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will
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without any human beings. Without operator travelling inside
this
type of feature could be beneficial for
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World
. The exam will
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some benefits that
this
trend may
be
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bring and
also
some
drowbacks
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drawbacks
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be taken into account.
Then
, I will explain how the advantages of
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driverless
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Vehicles
outweigh the disadvantages. Some downsides considered
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regarding
this
nowadays people
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many accidents because some careless drivers drive their
vehicles
dangerously.
Moreover
,these
drives
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take drugs and some of
the
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were drunk.
As a result
,
this
type of driverless murdered people by accident.
However
,
upcoming
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future has
a driverless
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a driverless vehicle
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vehicles
, operating with emulator things.
Therefore
these updated feature
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can be less harmful.
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, In 2020, The
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newspaper
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us
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some
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news
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this
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incident of
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.
On the other hand
, The most favourable
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is that after some years our
world
will be more updated. To be honest, updating
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gives us many advantages without any help of drivers we can go anywhere and do whatever
you
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want, just a click of a button.
For
this
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we could be safe from
accident
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accidents
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.
For example
, Mark Zuckerberg and Elon
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already invent many driverless cars. These cars are not available now. After some years
this
could be
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for
every one
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. To
be conclude
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, the upcoming
world
gives us many beneficial things like
diverless
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driverless
vehicles
etc. These
thing
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update our lives easily.
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Task Achievement
Your introduction lacks a clear thesis statement that directly responds to the question of whether the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages. It is crucial to directly address the prompt.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your main body paragraphs need to have clear topic sentences that summarise the content of the paragraph. Ensure each paragraph focuses on one main idea and use appropriate paragraphing.
Task Achievement
Support your ideas with specific examples and evidence. General statements without backing up with solid examples limit your ability to show the extent to which advantages outweigh disadvantages.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that the conclusion summarises your main points effectively and restates your position clearly. It should be a mirror of your introduction, providing closure to your essay.
Task Achievement
Proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and enhance clarity. The frequent errors and informal language can obscure the meaning and reduce the academic tone of your writing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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