The table shows Proportions of Pupils attending Four Secondary School Types between 2010 and 2020

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the percentage of students who

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four types of secondary

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from 2010 and 2020.

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, it can be seen that voluntary-controlled

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was the

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among the other types,

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, the least was specialist schools.

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community

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school

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increased dramatically

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the entire years, it was merely

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types

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school

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which experienced

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popular. It started at 12% in 2000,

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up in 2005

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32% and

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the highest percentage in 2009

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58%.

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, specialist, grammar and voluntary-controlled schools decreased

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the periods

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given.

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, it started in 2000 were about 12%, 24%, and 52% each, the next was in 2005 roughly 11%, 19% and 38% respectively.

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, in 2009, it slowly went down

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under 20%

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of the

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(specialist

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about

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10%,

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at 12%, and voluntary-controlled

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around

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20%).

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

156 words

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The table shows Proportions of Pupils attending Four Secondary School Types between 2010 and 2020

Some people think that all unviersity students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Can money bring happiness to people? Should people rather focus on moral values instead?

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You were absent from an important event held by the company you work for. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Apologize for your absence and explain the reasoning? Explain why you had to be at the other event? Explain what you will do to catch up?