The table shows Proportions of Pupils attending Four Secondary School Types between 2010 and 2020

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that

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the percentage of students who

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four types of secondary

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school

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schools

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from 2010 and 2020.

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, it can be seen that voluntary-controlled

school

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was the

popular

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among the other types,

whereas

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, the least was specialist schools.

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with, students who applied

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community

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school

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schools

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increased dramatically

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the entire years, it was merely

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types

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school

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which experienced

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although

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popular. It started at 12% in 2000,

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up in 2005

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32% and

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the highest percentage in 2009

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58%.

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, specialist, grammar and voluntary-controlled schools decreased

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the periods

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given.

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, it started in 2000 were about 12%, 24%, and 52% each, the next was in 2005 roughly 11%, 19% and 38% respectively.

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, in 2009, it slowly went down

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under 20%

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of the

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(specialist

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school

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schools

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about

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10%,

then

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grammar

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school

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schools

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at 12%, and voluntary-controlled

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school

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schools

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around

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20%).

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Dec 8, 2023

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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156 words

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The table shows Proportions of Pupils attending Four Secondary School Types between 2010 and 2020

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