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The table shows Proportions of Pupils attending Four Secondary School Types between 2010 and 2020

The table shows Proportions of Pupils attending Four Secondary School Types between 2010 and 2020
#proportions #pupils #four #school
The table illustrates
that
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the percentage of students who
going
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went to
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 four types of secondary
school
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schools
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 from 2010 and 2020.
Overall
, it can be seen that voluntary-controlled
school
 was the
popular
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most popular
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 among the other types,
whereas
, the least was specialist schools.
To begin
 with, students who applied
in
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 community
school
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schools
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 increased dramatically
in
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over
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 the entire years, it was merely
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a types
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types
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type
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 of
school
 which experienced
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althought
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although
 it was not
the
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popular. It started at 12% in 2000,
then
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 up in 2005
around
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 32% and
reach
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reached
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 the highest percentage in 2009
about
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 58%.
Moreover
, specialist, grammar and voluntary-controlled schools decreased
at
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 the periods
are
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given.
In addition
, it started in 2000 were about 12%, 24%, and 52% each, the next was in 2005 roughly 11%, 19% and 38% respectively.
Finally
, in 2009, it slowly went down
just
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 under 20%
each
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of each
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 of the
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 (specialist
school
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schools
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about
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 10%,
then
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school
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schools
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 at 12%, and voluntary-controlled
school
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schools
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around
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at around
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 20%).
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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