The chart below shows the annual pay (thousands of US dollars) for doctors and other workers in seven countries in 2004.

The chart below shows the annual pay (thousands of US dollars) for doctors and other workers in seven countries in 2004.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the annual pay (thousands of US dollars) for doctors and other workers in seven countries in 2004.
A glance at a bar graph provided reveals the number of
year
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years
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average
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of average
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incomes for other occupations and
doctors
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, measured in
thousand
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thousands
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of US dollars, in 2004.
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, the ones
of
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in
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the US took up the most remarkable proportion of both sections mentioned. In terms of yearly payments for other vocations, the US was the nation which paid for the employees with the highest salary range with more than 40, followed narrowly by the figure of Switzerland with exactly 4.
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, inhabitants came from France and Finland whose earnings constituted
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merely 20.
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, the other countries namely Italy,
Czech
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Republic and Germany all paid for those work
the
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with the
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lowest breakdown with absolutely 20. Regarding the number of salaries for the
doctors
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, The US was the only nation which could maintain its crown at the most surprising figure with 120. At the opposite end of
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the scales
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scales
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scale
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, Finnish
doctors
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only received slightly higher than 40 which was the lowest number compared to the others.
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, remaining countries namely Switzerland, France, Czech Republic, Germany and Italy were the nations which paid for the
doctors
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in
group
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groups
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of 60 to 70.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words doctors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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