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The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.

The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.
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Given are 2 graphs concerning
traveling
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travelling
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 in the
UK
.
While
 the former line graph reveals the
number
 of travels to and from the
UK
\ from 1979 to 1999, the latter bar graph indicates the figure
of
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for
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 the most
renown
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renowned
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 nations stopped
off
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apply
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by
the
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UK
 dwellers, in 1999 and both charts are measured in
million
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millions
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.
Overall
, in terms of the first graph, there was a progressive growth pattern witnessed in all data. Whilst the
number
 of
the
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UK
 holidaymakers to France took the most remarkable proportions. With respect to the visits to and from the
UK
,
although
 those data both had a comparatively homogeneous initial point, they experienced a yawning gap
of
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in
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level
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the level
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 of growth .
On the other hand
, the
number
 of times
UK
 inhabitants came over cross-borders underwent a consistent acceleration from more than 10 to over 5-fold hike, there was a less vigorous climb observed by that of foreigners dropping in The
UK
 from exactly 10 to merely 30. Regarding the most customary nations
traveled
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travelled
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 by
The
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UK
 dwellers in 1999, the
number
 of
holiday makers
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holidaymakers
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 to France was higher than any other data with more than 10, narrowly followed by that to Spain with approximately 10. Meanwhile,
to
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The USA, Greece,
Turkey
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and Turkey
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 constituted under 5 and Turkey was the country where the breakdown was the least insignificant
number
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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