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Nowadays, some consumers are less influenced by advertising than in the past. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development

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Commercials
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 are used to dupe
customers
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 into buying various
products
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however
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, nowadays consumers are not getting influenced by hyperbolical advertisements and the reasons behind that are access to
information
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 and oversaturation of
commercials
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. These reasons will be discussed in upcoming paragraphs and
also
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 will be discussed whether it is
positive
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a positive
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 or negative development. In the contemporary era, access to
information
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 has increased ,and sources of
information
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 are available in every house.In detail, online websites contain reviews and
discriptions
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descriptions
 from past users which makes it easy for new buyers to compare the product of their need.
Therefore
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, it has become difficult for established
companies
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 to fool
customers
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 using
adverisements
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advertisements
 so sellers
thesedays
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these days
 focus on
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quality
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the quality
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 of
products
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.
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, Amazon sellers with good
quality
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of
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products
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 make profits as good reviews help them in gaining sales.
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,
companies
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 become more
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quality focused
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.
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,
oversaturation
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the oversaturation
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 of
commercials
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 has made people sick and commoners have lost
their
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apply
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interest in
such
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 advertisements. Nowadays, ads are available everywhere from streets to billboards. To cite an example,
while
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 watching
youtube
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YouTube
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 two or three short
commercials
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 are given in every video.
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, these tricks
has
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 made
customers
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 sick of
commercials
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. From my standpoint, it is a positive development for
customers
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 as they do not invest their money in
low
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low-quality
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quality
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products
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 and
this
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 has made
companies
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 more
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quality oriented
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,and
focus
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the focus
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 of
companies
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 has shifted toward customer service and providing better
quality
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of
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items. To recapitulate,
decreased
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the decreased
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 influence of
commercials
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 is
result
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the result
a result
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 of access
of
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to
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information
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 and oversaturation of ads but
this
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 has made
favorable
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a favorable
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 impact on consumers are
companies
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has
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 become more responsible and are providing better
products
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.
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