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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Some people believe that spending money and living for today makes more sense than saving for the future. Do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today’s era, it is an individual preference
for living
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to live
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to the
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the
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apply
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life
at
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to
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fullest
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the fullest
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 by spending a
lot
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 on lifestyle, travelling and other things which makes the present moment happier for
people
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instead
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 of saving
the
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apply
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money
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 for
better
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a better
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 life in the
future
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. I would partially agree
to spend
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with spending
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lot
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a lot
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 of
money
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 for living the good life today but
also
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consideration
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consider
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 individual financial
situation
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 or any requirement
may
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that may
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 arise in the
future
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such
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 as a medical emergency, unemployment and many other reasons which may create
the
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a
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 difficult
situation
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 to survive
it
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apply
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in the
future
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. In developed countries like
Australia
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, Canada and
USA
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the USA
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,
the
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apply
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people
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 would like to spend a
lot
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 for their lifestyle
due to
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 financial securities offered by
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government
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the government
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such
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 as job seeker
payment
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, parental leave, childcare subsidiaries, medical
supports
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support
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, and many more to
support
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 the basic living standards during their unemployment period.
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, I
have
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migrated back to
Australia
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 in January 2022
along with
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 my wife and son after ten years
living
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of living
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 in
India
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. The Australian
government
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had
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provided all
sort
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sorts
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 of financial
support
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payment
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payments
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 every month on
base
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the base
a base
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 of
estimate
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estimated
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 family income till got employed in
Australia
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. Importantly, the
people
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 have
also
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 received
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lot
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a lot
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 of job seeker
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payment
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payments
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 during the COVID pandemic
situation
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 in
such
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 developed nations. On
other
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the other
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 prospect, in developing
country
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countries
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 like
India
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, Nepal, Pakistan and Bangladesh
where
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apply
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the
government
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 is not able to provide any financial
support
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 to the
people
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 if they are unemployed or individual circumstances arise like medical emergencies.
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,
the
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apply
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people
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 may have to save a
lot
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 of
money
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 for uncertain
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situation
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situations
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 in the
future
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 like
Covid Pandemic
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the pandemic
, medical
emergency
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emergencies
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, unemployment, and other studies to
support
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 a new career.
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, I have lived
ten
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for ten
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 years in
India
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 which always possible to
support
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 my family with lots of
money
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 saved in the past or any uncertain
situation
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arise
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arose
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 in those years.
To conclude
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that
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it is an individual choice
as well as
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 circumstances which are directly related
living
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to living
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 in
the
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a
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 developed and developing nation.
Importantly
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, to know that the
government
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 supports a citizen of their country during
the
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apply
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financial
difficult
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apply
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situation
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situations
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whereas
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apply
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a
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The
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 COVID pandemic
a
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is a
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perfect example, there were
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lot
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a lot
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 of job seeker
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payment
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payments
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 provided to
the
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apply
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people
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 in
Australia
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whereas
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 In
India
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,
the
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apply
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people
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 have to use all
saving
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savings
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 in order to
support
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 the families in
such
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situation
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.

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task achievement
Ensure that the essay's introduction clearly states whether you agree or disagree with the statement. Your essay should reflect this stance throughout, leading to a coherent conclusion that summarizes your viewpoint and the arguments presented.
coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs effectively, each with a clear main idea, followed by supporting sentences that expand on that idea. Transition words should be used appropriately to connect sentences and paragraphs, ensuring a smooth flow of ideas.
task achievement
Examples used should directly support your arguments. Ensure that they are specific, relevant, and strengthen your position. Include a mix of examples from personal experience, hypothetical situations, and wider societal observations.
coherence cohesion
Avoid overly complex sentence structures that may confuse the reader. Aim for clarity and precision in your language use, using a varied but understandable vocabulary.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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