Task 1. The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Task 1. The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
The chart provides information about the proportion of illiterate females and males in 6 different regions in 2000.
Overall
, the
number
of illiterate people in Developed
countries
, Latin America/Caribbean, and East
Asia
/Oceania was lower compared to Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, and South
Asia
; where the rates of illiterate people in South
Asia
were the highest than other regions, and Developed
countries
had the lowest numbers. From the chart given, it is noticeable that the rate for illiterate men in Developed
countries
was around 2%, and the
number
for women was approximately 5%. In Latin America, there was a small difference between the proportion of illiterate people, approximately 10% for males and 11% for females;
whereas
the
number
of illiterate women in East
Asia
more doubled than the
men
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which
was
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around 20% and 10% respectively. In regions of Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, and South
Asia
, the figures of illiterate females were higher compared to males. In terms of the illiteracy
number
for men, it was 30% in Sub-Saharan Africa, slightly under 30% in
Arab
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States, and around 35% in South
Asia
;
whereas
for women, it was slightly under 50%, around 50%, and approximately 55% in those three
countries
respectively.
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