More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time.   What problems does this cause?   What do you think is a possible solution?

Amount of customers in developing states who are buying cars for the first time
have
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increased. The main problems
this
causes
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pollution and raised
road
traffic
, and the most viable solution is
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public
transport
system
. The primary issue developing countries face when their citizens start to buy cars is higher
pollutant
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.
This
occurred
as a result
of fuel car exploitation that produces emissions
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as
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gas CO2 and others, all of
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influence on
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planet
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environment and
humans
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health. The greater number of vehicles on the
road
is
also
responsible for a rise in
traffic
jams.
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is because
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road
system
is not adjustable for these new enormous amounts of cars, and competition for
road
resources
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significantly which leads to
slowdown
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in
traffic
.
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, India has constant high
traffic
jams
due to
rapid economic and population growth,
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in megacities. A solution
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these problems is to develop and improve
public
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transport
system
.
This
would solve the problems by expansion
of
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routes and public vehicles, and modernisation
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the
logistic
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logistics
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of the public
transport
network.
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, when Copenhagen faced an issue with gridlocks on roads, the authority decided to innovate and expand the
system
through building new metro and
buses
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lines. Thanks to
this
, they have succeeded with reduced private cars’
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and have
maintain
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environmental well-being. In conclusion,
growing
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of personal
transport
in
third
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third-world
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states results in the emergence of issues
such
as atmospheric pollution and intense
traffic
on roads,
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can be addressed
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enhancing
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transportation network.
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