More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think is a possible solution?
Amount of customers in developing states who are buying cars for the first time
have
increased. The main problems Change the verb form
has
this
causes air
pollution and raised Add a missing verb
are air
road
traffic
, and the most viable solution is well-designed
public Correct article usage
a well-designed
transport
system
.
The primary issue developing countries face when their citizens start to buy cars is higher pollutant
. Fix the agreement mistake
pollutants
This
occurred as a result
of fuel car exploitation that produces emissions such
as a
gas CO2 and others, all of Correct article usage
the
them
exert Correct pronoun usage
which
harmful
influence on Add an article
a harmful
Correct article usage
the planet
planet
environment and Change noun form
planet's
humans
health. The greater number of vehicles on the Change the noun form
human
road
is also
responsible for a rise in traffic
jams. This
is because previous
Correct article usage
the previous
road
system
is not adjustable for these new enormous amounts of cars, and competition for road
resources raise
significantly which leads to Verb problem
rises
slowdown
in Add an article
a slowdown
traffic
. For example
, India has constant high traffic
jams due to
rapid economic and population growth, specially
in megacities.
A solution Replace the word
especially
for
these problems is to develop and improve Change preposition
to
public
Add an article
the public
transport
system
. This
would solve the problems by expansion of
routes and public vehicles, and modernisation Change preposition
apply
go
the Verb problem
apply
logistic
of the public Fix the agreement mistake
logistics
transport
network. For example
, when Copenhagen faced an issue with gridlocks on roads, the authority decided to innovate and expand the system
through building new metro and buses
lines. Thanks to Change the noun form
bus
this
, they have succeeded with reduced private cars’ using
and have Replace the word
use
maintain
environmental well-being.
In conclusion, Change the verb form
maintained
growing
of personal Verb problem
the growth
transport
in third
states results in the emergence of issues Correct word choice
third-world
such
as atmospheric pollution and intense traffic
on roads, it
can be addressed Correct pronoun usage
which
through
enhancing Change preposition
by
public
transportation network.Correct article usage
the public
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