Many believe that being good at a sport is result of talent while others think that it comes from hard work. Discuss both views and give your reasons.
People of the whole world enjoy sports but the person who is
perticipating
Correct your spelling
participating
on
the game Change preposition
in
is needed
to talented as well Wrong verb form
needs
hardworking
. A lot of people think that being good at a sport is an output of talent others consider that Correct word choice
as hardworking
come
from Correct subject-verb agreement
comes
heavily
practice. In Change the adverb
heavy
this
essay, we will discuss both point
Change to a plural noun
points
also
I am on the side of hard work.
At first,
sports is
a great , and someone Verb problem
apply
need
to be very talented to be a very Change the verb form
needs
well knowned
player. Correct your spelling
well-known
This
is something which comes genetically from previous ancestors. Secondly
, there are some games where talent is a must such
as chess. Here analytical thinking is the major bone of the game even if the player try
so hard to win but most of the period Change the verb form
tries
to
those Change preposition
apply
are
genetically talented. Correct pronoun usage
who are
For example
, my friend is good in
chess , and I tried a Change preposition
at
lots
to lose him but could not. He won most of the time.
Correct the article-noun agreement
lot
On the other hand
, being good in play serious workout is mandatory. Maybe a person is talented even he might be lose
the game he Change the verb form
lose
lose
interest Change the verb form
loses
on
Change preposition
in
repetive
Correct your spelling
repetitive
practicing
. Change the spelling
practising
Besides
this
, by pushing own everytime
the person understands the fault he was doing and makes the correction which he could not Rephrase
apply
do
if he Wrong verb form
have done
did
not Verb problem
had
practice
a lot. Wrong verb form
practised
For instance
, Usain Bolt is a
best runner in the whole world even Change the article
the
he
Correct word choice
though he
work
quite seriously from morning to night for being Change the verb form
works
ramain
the best.
Change the capitalization
Ramain
To sum up
, it is very clear that talent is something which everyone needs to do good in sports but without hard work
he might not get the ultimate result Add a comma
work,
eveytime
.Correct your spelling
everytime
every time
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