Topic 18: Some people say that television is useful for education, while others say that it is only useful for entertainment. Discuss both views and gives your own opinion.
Some people say that
television
is just useful for entertainment
, but others say that is
also
benefical
for Correct your spelling
beneficial
education
. I believe that television
is used for education
, but more and more television
display entertainment
program
than
Rephrase
rather than
education
, because many television
program
think about their rating rather than to be
educated, and Change the verb form
being
movie
or infotainment
are the program
which having many audiences that can increase their TV rating.
On the one hand, television
have
Change the verb form
has
education
Replace the word
educational
programs
that they make for children and adult. that programs
are about learning technique
for Fix the agreement mistake
techniques
student
who Fix the agreement mistake
students
watching
Wrong verb form
watch
television
. for example
, ruang guru
Correct your spelling
Ruang Guru
that have
Wrong verb form
has
one
Correct determiner usage
a
program
to discuss some exercise
to help Fix the agreement mistake
exercises
student
Fix the agreement mistake
students
in
their Change preposition
with
home work
. but, Correct your spelling
homework
sadness
that Replace the word
sad
program
is Correct article usage
the program
not
longer Correct your spelling
no
in
Change preposition
on
that
Correct determiner usage
apply
television
.
On the other hand
, movie
and Fix the agreement mistake
movies
infotainment
have many schedule
on Change to a plural noun
schedules
television
rather than education
. Many TV channels priorities
Replace the word
prioritise
to
Change the verb form
showing
show
many kind
of Change to a plural noun
kinds
movie
, like Fix the agreement mistake
movies
korea
series and drama series, all Correct your spelling
Korean
the
day. Correct article usage
apply
While
infotainment
is one of the favorite
Change the spelling
favourite
television
program
that Change to a plural noun
programs
also
have
many times to run. Many Change the verb form
has
television
have different infotainment
program
Fix the agreement mistake
programs
in
the same Change preposition
with
of
information and Change preposition
apply
it
can Correct pronoun usage
they
show
3 or 4 times a day, Gossip Wrong verb form
be shown
Show
for example
. Where they do not think that program
is educated or not. Correct article usage
the program
The
Correct article usage
Television
television
just think about their program
rating, and movie
or infotainment
have many audiences that increase their TV rating.
In conclusion, many program
of Change to a plural noun
programs
television
show
much time for entertainment
, like infotainment
and movie
programs
, and lack of education
programs
, because many television
just think about rating in their entertainment
programs
rather than how to educated
people.Wrong verb form
educate
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introduction/conclusion
Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the topic and your stance on it. Aim to have a more structured approach with distinct paragraphs for each view, and a separate one for your opinion.
logical structure
Work on organizing your ideas in a logical sequence, each paragraph should focus on one main idea. Use a range of linking words to connect ideas and paragraphs smoothly.
supported main points
Support your main points with specific examples and explanations. Avoid overly general statements and strive to show a deeper analysis of the given topic.
complete response
Make sure to address all parts of the task and develop a clear argument for your opinion. Provide a balanced discussion of both views before presenting your conclusion.
clear comprehensive ideas
Clarify and expand on your ideas to avoid being too vague or superficial. Aim for depth in your discussion and avoid repeating the same point.
relevant specific examples
Incorporate specific and relevant examples to strengthen your argument. Make sure these examples are connected to the point you are trying to make and add value to your essay.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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