The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The amount of
traffic
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in all bigger cities is incredibly enormous today. The need of the extended need
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transportation and necessary changes will be discussed in
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essay. Not surprisingly, the increased need to be on the other side of the city as soon as possible reflects the dynamic pace of the city`s lives. Apparently, the distances
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important institutions,
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university
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universities
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, medical
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centres
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, railway
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or shopping
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, are indeed quite long. Sometimes it is almost impossible to walk from our homes to these institutions.
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, the opportunities to handle
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time-consuming issue are scarce. It is possible to cross the city by car, but in
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case
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you probably spend more time
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looking for
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parking place than
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driving. The other choice is to use public
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. It is not
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convenient as
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car
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, but thanks
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network of public
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stops the most important places are covered. The
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of
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public
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are mostly the overcrowded buses, trams and subways with
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higher risk of contagious infections transmission or long waiting
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times
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.
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, I cannot imagine, how to effectively reduce the amount of
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traffic
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in the city than start to prefer public
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. Possibly, if
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public
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improved its services as the accessibility, price and waiting times, it would be
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preferred by more people, and the
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will
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be reduced.
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,
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density in the cities is really very high. It ought to be improved by public
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restructuralization, and probably by our better awareness of overloading of the amount of
traffic
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in the cities.
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