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You recently read an article in the newspaper about someone whom you know personally but have not heard from in a long time. You found that some of the information published was incorrect.

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Dear Sir, My name is Ali , a reader of your
article
 in
British
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 newspaper. Yesterday I noticed that you wrote about the singer Mikey who I have
been knowing
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him
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personally since we
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 together at
musical coral
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,So most of your information was incorrect leading me to
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disappointment
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 and frustrated
then
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I
write
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this
 letter to elaborate
the
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 mistake you have written. Your
article
 was
quiet
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 knowledgeable
with
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 ancient songs. you tell about The struggles faced
mankind
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as
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 that time. Even more, the
singer
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whose
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 handle
this
 issue And discuss
by
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term
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 of songs to deliver to the audience. The most error you mentioned in the
article
 was the date of
released
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the
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 famous song “quiet”,
Secondly
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 you mentioned apart from his personal life
and
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this
 is illegal to write About person life of
singer
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 without permission. I would like to invite you
on
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 a dinner
for
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correction
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 the errors.
Furthermore
,
releas
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release
releasing
released
 a new
article
 to inform the audience and readers about incorrect information you have written on the previous one. Looking forward to your response Faithfully yours. Ali
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task response
In regards to task response, your letter does not fully address the requirements of the task. You have mentioned a personal connection and pointed out some errors, but the letter lacks specific details and does not clarify what the incorrect information was or what the impact could be. To improve, ensure you fully answer all parts of the task and expand on specific points to give your letter greater impact and relevance.
coherence cohesion
Your essay shows a need for improvement in coherence and cohesion. The logical structure is not clearly established as ideas seem to be presented in a random order, and there is a lack of clear progression from one idea to the next. Transitions between ideas are also lacking, affecting the flow of your writing. To enhance this, plan your essay to have a clear beginning, middle, and end, along with using transition words to better connect ideas and paragraphs.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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