Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?
In recent era, the
Government
have spent a lot
of money
to improve the railways, buses, and new metro services
within the cities. Even, there are also
available huge government
grants
to develop the
local Correct article usage
apply
art
galleries like cinemas and museums. It is completely agreed to give more priority to the
public Correct article usage
apply
services
over the development
art
locations. Change preposition
of art
This
essay will cover the necessity to improve the local transportation system for the people
to travel in the city as well as
the Art
development
Grants
that must be distributed to the public transportation development
by the government
in coming years which will prove this
.
Firstly
, People
are facing the
difficulties in travelling in metro cities because Correct article usage
apply
limited
railways and bus frequency during working hours and there is Change preposition
of limited
high
flux of migration in the future as well. Add an article
the high
a high
For example
, Mumbai city will require the
more public Correct article usage
apply
services
to fulfil the requirements of the people
. Alternative
, the metro Change the word
Alternatively
rails
Change the noun form
rail
development
must be fastened to meet the
future requirements.
Correct article usage
apply
Secondly
, Government
has a spent lot
of money
to develop new cultural sites to create a national image around the globe. For instance
, it is Correct article usage
a completely
completely
waste of Change the word
complete
money
for the country which can used
to improve the needed facilities. Change the verb form
be used
For Example
, The Statue of Unity development
done by the Gujarat government
which
wasted Correct pronoun usage
apply
lot
of taxpayer’s Change the article
a lot
money
instead
of utilising for other purposes. Furthermore
, there is always a limited financial grant to the local states provided by central
Add an article
the central
government
. Therefore
, it will be better to pass such
grants
to the public services
over the art
sites
expansion.
To summarise, an Fix the agreement mistake
site
art
sites
does not solve the local taxpayer’s purpose, but the Change the noun form
site
money
is wasted to create the nation
image globally. Change noun form
nation's
Therefore
, it is clear to use this
grant to improve the primary facilities which will arise in coming years and the developing nation
has grants
are limited, it must be utilised to improve transportation facilities because the nation
brand image may cause Change noun form
nation's
lot
of Change the article
a lot
inconvenient
to the Replace the word
inconvenience
people
of nation
.Add an article
the nation
a nation
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