Some people think an international car-free day is an effective way to reduce air polution. Others think there are more effective ways to do this.

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Air
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pollution
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is one of the severe problems that should be
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as
effective
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as possible.
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people believe that international
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days
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are an effective approach to
reduce
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the contamination of
air
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polluted
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. In
this
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essay, I side with those who feel that there are any sensible other measures to deal with that issue. Let us
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at the fact that international
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days
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are not an
adept
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appropriate
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solution to reduce
air
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pollution
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. Undeniably, the
using
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of private
transportations
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transportation
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to migrate will not allowed when the event of
car-free
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days
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run. It means that the number of CO2 contamination
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produced by riding motorcycles will
reduce
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.
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, it is only
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effect, after that event
are
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finished, people can drive their cars, producing CO2.
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, Surakarta Indonesia
run
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car-free
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day every Sunday, but the rate of
air
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pollution
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there still
become
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the highest than among cities in Central Java Indonesia.
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, it cannot be denied that
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air
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the air
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pollution
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problem
require
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other ways. Turning to other measures
that
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is
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categorized
proper
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than running
car-free
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days
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.
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, the government should develop electric public vehicles with comfortable facilities. Without
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, societies will
prefer
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use public
transportations
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transportation
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to private cars.
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, the more people put off using private motorcycles, the better
air
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quality will be.
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, providing green space either by renovating
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forests
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or planting trees
on
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public areas is a sensible approach. The appearance of trees will absorb
air
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pollution
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directly. As an example, Japan, after offering
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modern public
tranportations
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transportation
transportations
and creating green
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, the proportion of
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air
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polluted
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pollution
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decrese
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decreases
gradually
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to year.
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, it is undeniable that there are
any
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other ways
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more effective than running international
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days
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, if the government provide
a
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proper public transportation and
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the green areas, it can solve
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air
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the air
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pollution
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issue.
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Your essay lacks a clear and logically structured flow of ideas, which hinders the reader's comprehension. It's important to organize your essay into clear paragraphs with each paragraph discussing a single idea or point. Use cohesive devices appropriately and avoid repeating points.
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While you addressed the task and presented a position, the essay does not fully extend and support its main points with specific details and examples. For a higher score, expand on your ideas with clear explanations and use a variety of sentence structures.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • reduce emissions
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  • government regulations
  • awareness campaigns
  • air quality
  • pollutants
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