The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph depicts how many individuals played basketball, tennis, badminton, and rugby in a region over a period of 20 years, from 1985. At a glance, it is noticeable that the number of tennis and rugby players experienced

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movement

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which are rise and fall, respectively, whilst the two other sports look stable. In terms of

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tennis and rugby, the number of former

player

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stood at 150 in

initial

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an initial

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year

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started to grow steadily by approximately 80 people

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the end of the period.

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with the latter, it started at just below 250 people in 1985.

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, it witnessed a gradual drop in the next 10 years to precisely 200 players

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plummeted to 50 individuals in 2005. In regard to basketball and badminton, there were around 85 and 55 people decided to join these sports, consecutively.

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both of them had a slight increase to 83 and 49 players, respectively, and

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number remained steady until the

last

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year.

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Dec 10, 2023

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Varied vocabulary

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