You recently went to visit a friend in their new home. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter tell your friend what you liked about his/her new house say what you did or enjoyed most about your stay with your friend suggest when and where you could meet your friend next
Dear Alice,
I am writing
a
heartiest congratulations Change the word
my
for
your new apartment.
Since I visited Change preposition
on
to
you I Remove the preposition
apply
was
elated to see Wrong verb form
have been
your
structure of the house. I liked your entrance which was designed with decent style. The architecture of the main walls Change the word
the
were
green scheme which Change the verb form
was
it
attracted me more. The Correct pronoun usage
apply
celling
walls were decorated with Correct your spelling
ceiling
new
Correct article usage
a new
style
Fix the agreement mistake
styles
looked
beautiful. The colour combination of the rooms Correct pronoun usage
that looked
were
appealing to me. Change the verb form
was
Besides
this
, I liked cupboard
section which Correct article usage
the cupboard
has
more spacious to put your winter and summer clothes separately with well organised. I Verb problem
is
opt
Verb problem
chose
this
idea to build my own house in the future.
I was
enjoyedUnnecessary verb
apply
a
lot at your place because We had been watching movies and Correct pronoun usage
it a
eaten
Wrong verb form
eating
late night
snacks. We did go outside Add a hyphen
late-night
for
shopping and you gifted me Change preposition
apply
a
expensive Change the article
an
wrist watch
which I Correct your spelling
wristwatch
really
thankful to you. Add a missing verb
am really
Moreover
, I enjoyed with your pet and he attached me to within
three days. Correct pronoun usage
it within
Overall
my experience was great with you and I amused
too.
I would like to meet you again at Add a missing verb
was amused
you
home so we will enjoy Correct pronoun usage
your
again
Correct pronoun usage
ourselves again
together
. If Rephrase
apply
its
possible we can meet again in the next month so we will memorise our old days at school. I would again congrats for your apartment.
I am looking forward to hearing from Replace the word
it's
it is
your
back.
Warm Wishes,Correct pronoun usage
you
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coherence cohesion
Your letter could benefit from a clearer logical structure. It would be helpful to organize your thoughts into distinct paragraphs, each addressing a different aspect of your visit or your suggestions.
coherence cohesion
For a higher score in greeting and closing, ensure you use appropriate sign-offs that match the level of formality of the letter. Also, consider adding a more personalized introduction to strengthen the connection with your friend.
coherence cohesion
To maintain a single idea per paragraph, focus on one main point in each paragraph and expand on it before moving on to the next point. This helps the reader follow your train of thought more easily.
task achievement
Your response to the task is good, but to achieve a higher score, ensure that all parts of the prompt are fully developed with specific details and clear progression of ideas throughout the letter.
task achievement
The tone of your writing is friendly and suited for a letter to a friend, but pay attention to the consistency of register throughout your writing. Avoid using overly formal or casual language and maintain an even tone that is appropriate for the context.