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Writing Samples
Band 5

You recently went to visit a friend in their new home. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter tell your friend what you liked about his/her new house say what you did or enjoyed most about your stay with your friend suggest when and where you could meet your friend next

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Dear Alice, I am writing
a
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 heartiest congratulations
for
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 your new apartment. Since I visited
to
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you I
was
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 elated to see
your
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 structure of the house. I liked your entrance which was designed with decent style. The architecture of the main walls
were
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 green scheme which
it
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attracted me more. The
celling
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ceiling
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 walls were decorated with
new
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a new
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style
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looked
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 beautiful. The colour combination of the rooms
were
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appealing to me.
Besides
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this
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, I liked
cupboard
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the cupboard
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 section which
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 more spacious to put your winter and summer clothes separately with well organised. I
opt
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this
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 idea to build my own house in the future. I
was
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enjoyed
a
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lot at your place because We had been watching movies and
eaten
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late night
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 snacks. We did go outside
for
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shopping and you gifted me
a
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 expensive
wrist watch
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 which I
really
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 thankful to you.
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, I enjoyed with your pet and he attached me to
within
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it within
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 three days.
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 my experience was great with you and I
amused
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 too. I would like to meet you again at
you
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your
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 home so we will enjoy
again
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ourselves again
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together
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. If
its
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 possible we can meet again in the next month so we will memorise our old days at school. I would again congrats for your apartment. I am looking forward to hearing from
your
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 back. Warm Wishes,

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coherence cohesion
Your letter could benefit from a clearer logical structure. It would be helpful to organize your thoughts into distinct paragraphs, each addressing a different aspect of your visit or your suggestions.
coherence cohesion
For a higher score in greeting and closing, ensure you use appropriate sign-offs that match the level of formality of the letter. Also, consider adding a more personalized introduction to strengthen the connection with your friend.
coherence cohesion
To maintain a single idea per paragraph, focus on one main point in each paragraph and expand on it before moving on to the next point. This helps the reader follow your train of thought more easily.
task achievement
Your response to the task is good, but to achieve a higher score, ensure that all parts of the prompt are fully developed with specific details and clear progression of ideas throughout the letter.
task achievement
The tone of your writing is friendly and suited for a letter to a friend, but pay attention to the consistency of register throughout your writing. Avoid using overly formal or casual language and maintain an even tone that is appropriate for the context.
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