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The chart show requests for information at a tourist office in the United kingdom from january to june

The chart show requests for information at a tourist office in the United kingdom from january to june
#show #requests #information #tourist #office #kingdom #january #june
The given line graph illustrates the trend of services through several methods: in
person
, by letter/email, and by phone, that served by a tourist
center
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centre
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 in
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the United
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United
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the United
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 Kingdom between January and June. The units are measured in
total
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the total
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 of
tourist
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tourists
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 per month.
Overalll
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Overall
, it can clearly be seen that way of services via in
person
 and by
telephone
 show the bigger growth,
whereas
 by letter/email fell. Two types of
request
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requests
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 that served by
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the toursit
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toursit
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tourist
 office in
person
 and by
telephone
were climb
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climbed
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 significantly in six months. In the initial year, the highest service
did
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done
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 by
telephone
, stood at approximately 900 but
then
 directly experienced a little drop in
february
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February
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 before soaking and reach the top
in
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on
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 precisely 1600 at the
mid year
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mid-year
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. Meanwhile, In
person
 method, stood at just over 400 in January
then
 encountered an outstanding increase between
may
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May
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 and
april
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April
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 which was
surpass
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surpassed
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 by
telephone
request
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requests
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.
This
 trend continued growth until
reach
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reached
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the
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its
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 peak in June
at
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apply
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1900. Information
request
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requests
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 by
telephone
,
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apply
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 stood at just
bellow
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below
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 800 in January.
However
,
this
 movement witnessed a moderate decrease to around 380 in May and
unchanged
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was unchanged
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 until June.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words person, telephone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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