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The maps show the developments which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.

The maps show the developments which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.
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The
given
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maps below show a
bookstore
 in 3000 and
current
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the current
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sutuation
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situation
 after
relocation
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the relocation
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 of
book
 sections.
Overall
, a comparison of the maps reveals that the
bookstore
 did not change the layout
sigificantly
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significantly
 and only had a small renovation in the
center
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centre
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 for commercial
purpose
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purposes
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.
However
, the major movement happened in the
book type
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 location. In terms of
bookstore
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the bookstore
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 prior to the development, the entrance door
is
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was
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 located to the west of the
bookstore
. The first
book
 section can be found in front of it was travel and new books. In the north of the
bookstore
 situated a letter L
book shelves
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bookshelves
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 for fiction books.
While
 in the
center
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centre
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 lie
in
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three
book shelves
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bookshelves
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 for Art, Hobbies and Cookery.
Last
, in the south near the entrance,
located
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the service desk and non-fiction part next to it. Regarding the changes in the
bookstore
,
fiction
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the fiction
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 section
experiece
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experienced
the
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a
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 major replacement with art, hobbies, cookery, and non-fiction. Three pairs of table and chair
has
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have
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 been
constucted
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constructed
conducted
 at the expense of three shelves
on
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in
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 the
center
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centre
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 of the
book store
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bookstore
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. Next to the south of it, non-fiction converted into
cafe
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a cafe
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.
Last
, travel, new books and service desk remain unchanged.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bookstore, book with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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