Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in team sports, like football. While other people think that taking part in individual sports is better, like swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There are debates
whether
people should involve themselves in individual or group Change preposition
about whether
sports
. Although
doing sports
alone benefits more on the comprehensive personal judgements, sports
activity in team
is giving more lessons in interpersonal relationship.
A one-person sport might Add an article
the team
a team
be benefited
in terms of receiving complete Wrong verb form
benefit
feedbacks
. Generally, trainers will be more focused Fix the agreement mistake
feedback
in
Change preposition
on
controling
and evaluating one player, Correct your spelling
controlling
hence
the feedback of
their performances Change preposition
on
are
given in a Correct subject-verb agreement
is
detail
, yet immaculate way, in order to improve their area of weakness, and Replace the word
detailed
consequently
gradually enhance their abilities. However
, I think it is unfortunate for the players,
since they cannot obtain Remove the comma
apply
another skills
that might be learned from doing Replace the adjective
another skill
other skills
sports
.
Conversely
, team sports
taught its players to not only pay attention toward
capabilitiesChange preposition
to
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
to be aware of other's behaviours. That skill is quite essential in a
collective-played Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
sports
,
because during a match, actions from each Remove the comma
apply
players
are related to one another in causal and effect patterns. Change to a singular noun
player
For instance
, the accuracy point from striker
to be able to Correct article usage
a striker
shot
a goal in Wrong verb form
shoot
football
match depends on the kicking angle from the middle field player. I, Correct article usage
a football
therefore
suport
Correct your spelling
support
this
view since, as a human, people are taught to be social
Add an article
a social
the social
person
which means they have to be able to feel the presence of other Fix the agreement mistake
people
poeple
, and through group Correct your spelling
people
sports
activity, that attitude can be accomplished.
In conclusion, individual sports
might advantageous
in their complete evaluations to improve weakness Add a missing verb
be advantageous
spot
, but in Fix the agreement mistake
spots
a
bigger picture, I Correct article usage
the
belisve
team Correct your spelling
believe
sports
can taught
people to acknowledge the important Change the verb form
teach
be taught
existance
of others.Correct your spelling
existence
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