The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.

The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.
The line graph compares information about
fruits
, that were manufactured in
France
,
Spain
,
Turkey
and
Germany
over a period of 40 years       
It is clear that
Spain
was by far the biggest producer of
fruits
over the period shown.
Turkey
ans
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and
France
saw the most significant changes among these four countries.          In 1970
Spain
was the main manufacturer in
graph
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and
produce
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produced
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more than 5
million
of
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tonnes
.
Fruits
were
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provided by
Germany
,
Turkey
and
France
were 2,5 , 2 and
near to
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nearly
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1
million
of
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tonnes
respectively. From 1970 to 1980,
fruits
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fruit
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production from
Spain
rose slightly to a peak
6
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of 6
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
.
By contrast
, the figure for
Germany
gell
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fell
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by 2
million
of
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tonnes
between 1970 and 1990.
While
Turkey
and
France
increased to between 2 and 3
million
of
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tonnes
and overtook
Germany
.         Between 1980 and 2010
figure
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for
Spain
fell to 5
million
of
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tonnes
,
while
Germany
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Germany's
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fruit production after
decrease
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a decrease
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in 1990 remained at
this
level for the rest of
period
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.
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Turkey's
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Turkey
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manufacturing experienced
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the
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stable growth from just under 3
million
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of
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tonnes
to more than 3
million
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apply
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of
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apply
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tonnes
,
while
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France's
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France
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France's
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production plunged to
near to
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nearly
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2
million
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of
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tonnes
in 2000 and jumped to well over 3
million
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apply
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of
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tonnes
over the next decade.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words fruits, france, spain, turkey, germany, million, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • produce
  • trends
  • decrease/increase
  • production
  • peak
  • fluctuation
  • stability
  • volatility
  • significant
  • milestone
  • conjecture
  • harvest
  • agricultural
  • yield
  • decade
  • data representation
  • timespan
  • graph analysis
  • comparative
  • rankings
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