The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.

The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.
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The line graph compares information about
fruits
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, that were manufactured in
France
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,
Spain
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,
Turkey
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and
Germany
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over a period of 40 years       
It is clear that
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Spain
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was by far the biggest producer of
fruits
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over the period shown.
Turkey
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ans
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and
France
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saw the most significant changes among these four countries.          In 1970
Spain
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was the main manufacturer in
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the graph
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and
produce
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produced
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more than 5
million
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of
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tonnes
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.
Fruits
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were
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provided by
Germany
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,
Turkey
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and
France
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were 2,5 , 2 and
near to
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nearly
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1
million
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of
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tonnes
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respectively. From 1970 to 1980,
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fruits
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fruit
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production from
Spain
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rose slightly to a peak
6
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of 6
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millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
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.
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, the figure for
Germany
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gell
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fell
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by 2
million
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of
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tonnes
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between 1970 and 1990.
While
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Turkey
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and
France
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increased to between 2 and 3
million
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of
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tonnes
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and overtook
Germany
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.         Between 1980 and 2010
figure
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the figure
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for
Spain
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fell to 5
million
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of
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tonnes
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,
while
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Germany
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fruit production after
decrease
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a decrease
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in 1990 remained at
this
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level for the rest of
period
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.
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Turkey's
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Turkey
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manufacturing experienced
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the
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stable growth from just under 3
million
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of
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tonnes
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to more than 3
million
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of
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tonnes
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,
while
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France's
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France
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production plunged to
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nearly
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2
million
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of
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tonnes
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in 2000 and jumped to well over 3
million
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of
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tonnes
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over the next decade.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words fruits, france, spain, turkey, germany, million, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • produce
  • trends
  • decrease/increase
  • production
  • peak
  • fluctuation
  • stability
  • volatility
  • significant
  • milestone
  • conjecture
  • harvest
  • agricultural
  • yield
  • decade
  • data representation
  • timespan
  • graph analysis
  • comparative
  • rankings
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