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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or dis agree.

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In the realm of education, there is a perennial debate revolving around whether university
comittees
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committees
 should accept
same
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number
 of men and women students in each subject. In
this
 regard, I am inclined to believe that they should not do it
due to
 the different demands and no robust argument. It could be argued that every college student has different
interest
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 regardless of
the
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sex, so trying to equalize the
number
 of
attenders
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 in each class would be difficult. In many cases, the
number
 of male and female students would be different. There are,
for instance
, several
female
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 tend to choose humanity fields and others tend to STEM (science, tech, engineering, and math).
As a consequence
, in some
subject
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subjects
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, women are
dominate
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,
while
 others are vice
viersa
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versa
.
This
 trend took place because
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the fact
that
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no relationship between gender and
selected
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 course. It should not be forgotten that there is a vague goal
from
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 equalize the
number
. There are those who think that
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 similar
number
 is part of affirmative action. Needless to say, affirmative action should be implemented in the bigger
field
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fields
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,
such
 as the
number
 of
a
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house
representative
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representatives
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, political
party
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, and civil
societies member
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,
while
sex-based
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number
 of students in certain classes is not a crucial and vital issue. There is no firm argument to equalize
this
 figure. To take everything into account, the university
comitte
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committee
committed
 should not balance the
number
 of sex because of two reasons, which are distinct
interests
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 courses and no strong reason.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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