the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015

the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015
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The bar chart gives some detailed information about the rate of export in a Particular country in five different items in 2015 and the following year.
overall
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, petroleum
Products
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and engineered goods Were the most common ITems For comporting in 2015 and 2016,
whereas
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textiles had the lowest level of earning export in the same year.
According to
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the given table, all
products
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experienced a swell in their values
besides
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the greatest progress
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to textiles (15.24%) and engineered goods (8.5%)
however
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, agriculture
products
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had the lowest alterations (just under
1percent
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1 per cent
) ,meanwhile, gems and jewellery Sew a dramatic drop in the rate of values. (5.18%. ) Turning to the given data, Petroleum
Products
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increased gradually from 62 to 64
billions
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.
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also
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the income which was derived from engineered
gods
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goods
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exporting grew from 57 billion to 62 approximately,
furthermore
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, the incomes of agricultural
products
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Followed the same patterns in both years. (about 31 billion.)
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exports, categories, value, goods, services
  • Trends, increase, decrease, percentage, compared
  • Significant, minimal, fluctuation, remained stable
  • Domestic product, international trade, economic indicators
  • Manufacturing, agriculture, technology, textiles
  • Revenue, economic growth, trade deficit
  • Forecast, predict, anticipate, implications
  • Global market, exchange rate, competitiveness
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