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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Smmarise te information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparasions where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Smmarise te information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparasions where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the donation percentage of
people
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 in the UK by age group in 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, the percentage of
people
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 from the age group 18-50
years
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 old experienced a decrease in terms of giving donations between 1990 and 2010. Meanwhile, groups over 50
years
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 old witnessed an increase. As a bar shows, the age group of 18-25
years
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old
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decreased in giving money to charity from about 17% in 1990 to around 7% in 2010.
In contrast
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, the percentage of
people
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 in 26-35 ages and 36-50 ages have decreased to give donations from nearly 30% to about 40%, and around 42% to 35%, respectively.
On the other hand
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, British
people
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 in 51-65 ages witnessed an increase in giving their money to charity from 35% in 1990 to about 40% in 2010.
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,
people
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 over 65
years
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 have remained
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 rise as well, it was accounted for over 30% in 1990 up to 35% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Charitable contributions
  • Demographic segmentation
  • Age range/bracket
  • Philanthropic behavior
  • Trend analysis
  • Statistical comparison
  • Donation patterns
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Generational differences
  • Percentage increase/decrease
  • Decade-on-decade comparison
  • Financial altruism
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