The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph depicts the average monthly alterations in the Prices of Copper, Nice and Zine metal during a period of a year. (in 2014).
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it was measured based on percentage.
overall
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can be seen Nickle
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experienced the greatest level of price in the first month of 20k4, meanwhile, it saw the lowest amount of Price in June.
According to
the given graph, Zine Cost fluctuated around(+1 to 3)From January to May,
however
, it had an abrupt drop in June. (from +1 to - 1)
also
zinc decreased gelradually since February to may .(From +3% to +1%)
Furthermore
; copper had a lot of ups and downs until July and from
then
it remained stable
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3 months. (+1%.),
although
it had a downward trend in October, it witnessed a swell (by +1 %).
To sum up
, from July until October all three Kinds of metals levelled out u their price.
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  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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