The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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comparison
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the average
price
changing
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per month
on
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copper
,
nickel
, and
zinc
for a year period in 2014.
Overall
, the
cost
of
nickel
and
zinc
were likely to fluctuate and unstable through a significant change,
while
copper
remained stagnant over the period shown. In January,
nickel
was the most expensive metal as its
price
had a 6% growth, followed by
copper
and
zinc
.
However
, that number dropped drastically to 1%,
while
the
price
for
zinc
started to overpass
nickel
in May, with
copper
remained
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the lowest. For the next three months, all prices declined gradually until
nickel
became the cheapest metal with -
3
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% reduction
on
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its
cost
, and in reverse,
copper
turned
to
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out to
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be the pricey one just after experiencing stagnation. The
price
for three metals,
then
significantly increased (except for
zinc
) just before
went
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plateau until September. One month later, the
cost
for both
copper
,
zinc
, and
nickel
decreased within a range
-0,5
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% until -1% before massively
increased
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to over 1%, except for
copper
.
Finally
,
zinc
turned out to
had
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the highest changes in
price
for
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2% followed by
copper
,
while
nickel
only had a
different
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of 1% transformation on its
cost
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, copper, nickel, zinc, cost with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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