The charts below show Australian dollars in Australia’s trade in three nations from 2004 to 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show Australian dollars in Australia’s trade in three nations from 2004 to 2009

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The graphs compare and contrast data on Australian dollars used Australia's
trade
with different three countries between 2004 and 2009.
Overall
,
while
trade
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the trade
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of Australia with
USA
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the USA
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was
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steadily
remain
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remained
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,
commercial
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commerce
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with China
had
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increased
continiously
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continuously
during
this
period. The
import
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imports
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and
exports
with China increased
a
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in a
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way parallel with each other. In 2004, the
amount
of
exports
was just above 10 AS
billions
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billion
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.
In addition
, the
amount
of
import
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imports
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was approximately 20 AS
billions
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billion
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in
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at
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the same time.
While
,
exports
increased steadily, after 2007 within two years, it
grown
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has grown
grew
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dramatically from about 20 AS
billions
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billion
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to nearly 35 AS billion. The
amount
of
import
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imports
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remained steady between 2008 and 2009
with
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at
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almost 30
As
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apply
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billions
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billion
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.
On the other hand
, Australia's
trade
with Japan had many fluctuate in their
exports
,
whereas
their
import
was the nearly same over the 5 years with almost 20 AS
billions
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billion
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. There was
steady
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a steady
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increase in the
amount
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number
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of
exports
from 20 AS
billions
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billion
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to 30 As
billions
,
however
, it considerably boosted to above 40 AS
billions
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billion
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and
then
it returned
at
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to
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previous
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the previous
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amount
. From 2004 to 2009,
trade
with
USA
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the USA
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due to
both
exports
and
import
was no
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did not
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any
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apply
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significant
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significantly
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change,
exports
remained
almost
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at almost
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10 AS
billions
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billion
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and
import
was approximately 20 AS
billions
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billion
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words trade, import, exports, amount, billions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trade surplus
  • trade deficit
  • bilateral trade
  • exports
  • imports
  • economic relationship
  • year-on-year growth
  • trade volume
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • stagnation
  • commodities
  • market forces
  • import/export ratio
  • financial quarter
  • trade barriers
  • tariff
  • free trade agreement
  • economic indicators
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