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The charts below show Australian dollars in Australia’s trade in three nations from 2004 to 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show Australian dollars in Australia’s trade in three nations from 2004 to 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The graphs compare and contrast data on Australian dollars used Australia's
trade
 with different three countries between 2004 and 2009.
Overall
,
while
trade
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the trade
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 of Australia with
USA
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the USA
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was
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steadily
remain
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remained
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,
commercial
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commerce
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 with China
had
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increased
continiously
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continuously
 during
this
 period. The
import
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imports
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 and
exports
 with China increased
a
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in a
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way parallel with each other. In 2004, the
amount
 of
exports
 was just above 10 AS
billions
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billion
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.
In addition
, the
amount
 of
import
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imports
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 was approximately 20 AS
billions
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billion
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in
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at
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 the same time.
While
,
exports
 increased steadily, after 2007 within two years, it
grown
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has grown
grew
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 dramatically from about 20 AS
billions
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billion
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 to nearly 35 AS billion. The
amount
 of
import
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imports
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 remained steady between 2008 and 2009
with
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at
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 almost 30
As
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apply
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billions
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billion
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.
On the other hand
, Australia's
trade
 with Japan had many fluctuate in their
exports
,
whereas
 their
import
 was the nearly same over the 5 years with almost 20 AS
billions
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billion
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. There was
steady
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a steady
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 increase in the
amount
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number
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 of
exports
 from 20 AS
billions
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billion
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 to 30 As
billions
,
however
, it considerably boosted to above 40 AS
billions
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billion
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 and
then
 it returned
at
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to
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previous
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the previous
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amount
. From 2004 to 2009,
trade
 with
USA
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the USA
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due to
 both
exports
 and
import
was no
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did not
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any
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apply
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significant
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significantly
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 change,
exports
 remained
almost
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at almost
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 10 AS
billions
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billion
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 and
import
 was approximately 20 AS
billions
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billion
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trade, import, exports, amount, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trade surplus
  • trade deficit
  • bilateral trade
  • exports
  • imports
  • economic relationship
  • year-on-year growth
  • trade volume
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • stagnation
  • commodities
  • market forces
  • import/export ratio
  • financial quarter
  • trade barriers
  • tariff
  • free trade agreement
  • economic indicators
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