In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their productcts are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
For advertising purposes,
company
often market their Add an article
the company
a company
product
as always having something new, this
is needed for the company
to keep catching up to their competitor
. Fix the agreement mistake
its competitors
From
my Change the preposition
In
opinion
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opinion,
this
is something that need
to be encouraged.
With the advance of technology, the differences between Change the verb form
needs
product
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the product
is
becoming more and more subtle, especially for Change the verb form
are
the
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product
that basically serve
the same purposes, Change the verb form
serves
for
example
the Add the comma(s)
example,
purposes
of a mobile Fix the agreement mistake
purpose
phone
is to communicate, so to make their mobile phone
better, company
need to keep adding Correct article usage
the company
feature
to their Add an article
a feature
the feature
phone
, like camera, video recording, high speed
internet etc. Add a hyphen
high-speed
Until at
one point they run out of major features to add, and from Change preposition
At
this
point
the Add a comma
point,
competition
is in the small detail, such
as our product
have the telephoto camera, our product
have a
superior image stabilization etc. The Correct article usage
apply
company
need to make sure that their product
stand
out from the Change the verb form
stands
competition
so the customer
knows that they are making the best product
.
Furthermore
, with the company
feeling needed
to introduce something new in their Wrong verb form
feels the need
product
, the one who will benefit the most from it is the final customer
. Competition
in business is always good for customer
, as we can get the best Fix the agreement mistake
customers
product
with the minimum price to pay. For example
, with
the rise of cheap smartphone Change preposition
apply
manufacturer
from China like Xiaomi who can manufacture a good Fix the agreement mistake
manufacturers
phone
with
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at
decent
price, Add an article
a decent
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has
the
big Correct article usage
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manufacturer
like Samsung to produce a smartphone which can compete with Xiaomi, in the Fix the agreement mistake
manufacturers
end
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end,
customer
now have much broader choice of Fix the agreement mistake
customers
phone
with sensible price.
In conclusion, the tendency of company
to market their Correct article usage
a company
product
to have
something different from their competitor is Unnecessary verb
apply
very
positive development as the Add an article
a very
competition
between manufacturer force
their Change the verb form
forces
product
to be better and in the end
it is the Add a comma
end,
customer
who reaps the benefit from this
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
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Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite