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The charts below show Australian dollars in Australia’s trade in three nations from 2004 to 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show Australian dollars in Australia’s trade in three nations from 2004 to 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart illustrates the
value
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 of
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Australia
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Australia's
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 trade with its partner countries, specifically
China
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,
Japan
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 and
United
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the United
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 States for the period between 2004 and 2009. Looking at the chart,
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Australia
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Australia's
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 trade with
China
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 is always increasing, and with
Japan
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, it was
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 increasing except for 2008 and with the US there is not much difference between 2004 and 2009. Australian export
value
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 trend is looking toward
positive
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a positive
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 trend for
China
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 and
Japan
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. The export
value
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 with
China
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 in 2004 was around $12
Billion
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 and by 2009 it was about $35
Billion
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, and so
does
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with
Japan
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 which was at $20
Billion
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 in 2004 and peaking in 2008
by
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at
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 almost $40
Billion
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 but by 2009 it dropped to around $30
Billion
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.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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Australia
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Australia's
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 export
value
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 with
US
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the US
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 is stagnating at around $10
Billion
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. For the
import
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value
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,
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Australia
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Australia's
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import
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 from the three countries was about the same in 2004 at $20
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, but by 2009 it
is
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 only
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import
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the import
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value
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 from
China
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 that
keeps
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kept
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 increasing,
while
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 the
import
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value
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 from
Japan
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 and
US
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the US
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is
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was
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 stable at around $20
Billion
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, australia, china, japan, billion, import with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trade surplus
  • trade deficit
  • bilateral trade
  • exports
  • imports
  • economic relationship
  • year-on-year growth
  • trade volume
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • stagnation
  • commodities
  • market forces
  • import/export ratio
  • financial quarter
  • trade barriers
  • tariff
  • free trade agreement
  • economic indicators
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