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The maps below show changes that occured to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.

The maps below show changes that occured to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.
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The maps below illustrate how a
town
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 named Willington changed in 1780, 1860 and 2000. From an
overall
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 perspective, the
town
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 experienced significant development and modernization with
new
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a new
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 system road, a lot of residential and education facilities with commercial
center
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centre
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 replacing
green
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the green
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 system and old
agricultural
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agriculture
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. In 1780, to
east
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the east
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 of the
river
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lied
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lay
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few
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a few
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 farms and
woods
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. There were
also
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 100
homes
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 and
villages
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 near the
river
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. In 1860, the
town
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 had changed considerably
compare
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compared
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 to 1780. On the east side of the
river
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,
the
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a
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 road was built leading the
villages
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. The
woods
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 were chopped down a little and the farms were demolished to construct more
100
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than 100
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homes
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 and more
villages
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. The bridge
also
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 was built to cross the
river
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 easily. By 2000, the
town
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 had many changes. The vacant land was expanded
because
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because of
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 the disappearance of the farms and
woods
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.
Besides
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, the schools and sports fields were built and replaced
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woods
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wood
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.
Homes
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 and
villages
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 increased and
road
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a road
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 was built
crossed by
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across
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 500
homes
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. On the east side of the
river
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, there were shops which
lied
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lay
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 opposite the schools and sports fields. South of the
the
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shops,
the
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a
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 wetland for birds was erected to get water in
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river
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the river
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 to moisten the soil for birds.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, river, woods, homes, villages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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