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The charts below show Australian dollars in Australia’s trade in three nations from 2004 to 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show Australian dollars in Australia’s trade in three nations from 2004 to 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graphs compare Australia's trade with
China
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,
Japan
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 and the United States in Australian
dollars
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 over a 6-year
period
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.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that
exports
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 in Australia's exchange with
Japan
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 have had the highest revenue.
In contrast
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, the trade with
China
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 and the USA,
imports
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 have had more importance than
exports
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 over the
period
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 shown. In 2004, Australia's commerce with
Japan
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,
exports
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 had approximately 20
billion
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dollars
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 and
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had a significant increase until 2008, and began to fall to nearly 32
billion
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dollars
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 in 2009.
Imports
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 with
Japan
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 have remained stable over the years with a small increase in 2007 achieving 23
billion
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 in 2008 and they tended to decrease.
On the other hand
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, in commercialisation with
China
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 and the USA, the revenue from importation was higher than
exports
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. In
China
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, both
exports
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 and
imports
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 have a significant growth over the 6-year
period
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,
although
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imports
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 have remained stable after 2008 at 30
billion
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dollars
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.
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, in the USA, both of them remained steady over the
period
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 shown and had a small increase in 2007 and fell to 20
billion
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dollars
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 in
imports
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 and 10
billion
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 in
exports
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 in the
last
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 year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, japan, dollars, period, exports, imports, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trade surplus
  • trade deficit
  • bilateral trade
  • exports
  • imports
  • economic relationship
  • year-on-year growth
  • trade volume
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • stagnation
  • commodities
  • market forces
  • import/export ratio
  • financial quarter
  • trade barriers
  • tariff
  • free trade agreement
  • economic indicators
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