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the diagram below shows the floor plan of public library 20 years ago and how it look now,

the diagram below shows the floor plan of public library 20 years ago and how it look now,
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The layout illustrates the interior of a public library at
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current situation in
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comparison
 with two decades ago.
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, several
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noticeable
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 alterations have
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happened
 in the systems of the library,
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 the
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 building has remained unchanged. Turning to the given diagram, fiction books
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adult
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 and children are divided
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 two sections, other words,
chldren's
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children's
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books
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 are set in a room in the
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 of the main salon, close to
storytelling
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the storytelling
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 worts,
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,
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 desk is replaced with a Cafe,
as well as
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in front
 of the Cafe.
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 and chairs which were allocated
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for sitting
removed
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, a room is dedicated
for
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 computers
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 the left side
the
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 entrance door and
children's
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the children's
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 books department was destroyed to make way for
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the lecture
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 room.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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