The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart provides information on the number of
hours
spent by visitors from four different countries on their activities during their vacation in Greece in 2019. 
Overall
,
Chinese
and American
tourist
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tourists
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seemed to
spent
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spend
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most of their
time
to read
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reading
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a book,
while
Turkish and Brazilian visitors enjoyed more
time
at the beach. Among three activities that can be done during vacation in Greece,
Chinese
people
are spoiled
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spoil
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themselves with reading book
activity
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activities
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for eight
hours
long
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apply
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,
while
the rest of the
tourist
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tourists
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only stand for below than six
hours
, with both Turkish and Brazilian visitors
shared
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sharing
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the same amount of
time
.
Conversely
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  when it comes to spending
time
on the beach, Brazilians took a longer
time
for
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apply
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six
hours
long, meanwhile the rest of the group
cannot
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could not
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stand longer than five
hours
, and surprisingly
Chinese
people did not use to wasting
time
on
beach
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the beach
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.
Furthermore
, American and Turkish people turn out to share the same activity during
holiday
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holidays
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as they are equally devoting three
hours
per day to visiting locations in Greece, which surprisingly
not
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is not
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favoured enough among the rest of the group especially
Chinese
folks
that
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who
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only spare one hour per day to do that activity.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, chinese, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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