The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and pie charts outline the total amount of money available for polices in one city
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in Britain for 2017 and 2018.
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the table
demonstartes
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demonstrates
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the budget
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, the pie charts explain how
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budget is distributed.
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, in comparison with
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2017,
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the income of the
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increased in 2018. In both years, the dominance of
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how the income was spent
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to the
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of salaries and it is followed by building and
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and technology, respectively. In detail, the budget originated from
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government, local taxes and other sources. The total income was 304.7
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millions
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in 2017 and it has increased to 318.6 in 2018.
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the total amount distributed
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175.5
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millions
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, 91.2
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millions
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and 38
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millions
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in 2017, it
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177.8
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millions
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, 102.3
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millions
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and 38.5
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millions
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in 2018, respectively. The highest
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the
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of local taxes.
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, the distribution of how the money was spent was not changed in terms of ranking between
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years. The dominance
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to
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salaries and
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followed by building
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transports
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transport
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and technology.
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the salaries
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75% in 2017,
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decreased to 69% in 2018. The only
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which has increased in proportion was technology. It increased its share to 14% from 8%.
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, the only
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which remained steady was buildings and
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transport
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words category, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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