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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and pie charts outline the total amount of money available for polices in one city
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in Britain for 2017 and 2018.
While
 the table
demonstartes
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demonstrates
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budget
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the budget
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, the pie charts explain how
this
 budget is distributed.
Overall
, in comparison with
2017
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 the income of the
polices’s
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polices
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 increased in 2018. In both years, the dominance of
the
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how the income was spent
belong
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 to the
category
 of salaries and it is followed by building and
transports
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 and technology, respectively. In detail, the budget originated from
national
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the national
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 government, local taxes and other sources. The total income was 304.7
millions
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million
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 in 2017 and it has increased to 318.6 in 2018.
While
 the total amount distributed
as
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was
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 175.5
millions
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million
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, 91.2
millions
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million
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 and 38
millions
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million
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 in 2017, it
become
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 177.8
millions
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million
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, 102.3
millions
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million
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 and 38.5
millions
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million
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 in 2018, respectively. The highest
grew
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 happened
at
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 the
category
 of local taxes.
Furthermore
, the distribution of how the money was spent was not changed in terms of ranking between
two
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the two
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 years. The dominance
belong
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belongs
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 to
the
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salaries and
then
 followed by building
and
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transports
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transport
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 and technology.
While
 the salaries
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 75% in 2017,
it has
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they
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 decreased to 69% in 2018. The only
category
 which has increased in proportion was technology. It increased its share to 14% from 8%.
Also
, the only
category
 which remained steady was buildings and
transports
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transport
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words category, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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