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Describe the changes on the island due to some construction of tourism facilities shown in the two maps

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The given two maps depict the changes that happened on the particular
island
due to
 the
construction
 of some tourist
facilities
. It is evident that there has been a radical change in the transportation
facilities
 and other infrastructures.
Firstly
, Before the
construction
, the
island
 was bounded on all sides by a sea and there were two bunches of coconut trees of which one bunch was near the east coast and another was near the west. There was a beach on the west coast of the
island
.
Secondly
, after the
construction
, there were some massive changes to the housing
facilities
 of the
island
. A restaurant has been constructed on the north end of the
island
.
In addition
, a reception has been built which has been connected through a vehicle track which ends in the jetty. The jetty, which is supported by some piers, has been built for boarding purposes. Some accommodation
facilities
 have been developed on
the
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 which have been separated by the vehicle track. All the coconut trees have been cut down for
construction
 purposes and some other coconut trees have been planted in other locations. In conclusion, there has been a massive change in the accommodation and transport
facilities
 of the
island
 to ensure better tourism services.
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Ensure you present a clear overview with key features but avoid excessive detail. Develop your main points and provide specific comparative language relevant to maps.
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