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The table gives information about five types of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.

The table gives information about five types of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
The table provided
illustrate
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 the registration status for five different types of
vehicles
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 in three years (2010, 2012, and 2014) in Australia.
Overall
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, all of them had experienced an increase in terms of the registered volume in
this
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 period,
although
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 the incremental level varied. The change
of
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in
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 the market proportion of Motorcycles was most significant with
30.8
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a 30.8
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% increment, showing the registered amount rising from 540,000 in 2010 to 709,000. In stark contrast, the market shares of heavy trucks had the lowest increase with 8.3%, with the amount rising from 384,000 to 416,000 by the end of
this
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 term.
Although
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 Light trucks
was
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were
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 the type of vehicle that had the second highest increase, the total volume of these
vehicles
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, registered as 131,000 in 2014,
were
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was
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 the minimum among the five types. With
lower
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a lower
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 changing ratio than light trucks, the changes of commercial
vehicles
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 (17.4%) and passenger
vehicles
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 (10.2%) represented the biggest amounts of registered automobiles in Australia, rising from 2,300,000 to 2,700,00 and 11,800,000 to 13,000,000 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • trends
  • registration
  • vehicles
  • comparison
  • categories
  • growth
  • decline
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • surge
  • consistent
  • pattern
  • speculate
  • factors
  • economic conditions
  • consumer preferences
  • advancements
  • technology
  • implications
  • infrastructure
  • environment
  • societal behaviors
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