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You had to cancel a meeting with a friend. Write a letter to him/her, in your letter - Apologise for cancelling the meeting - Explain why you couldn't be there - Suggest an alternative day when you could meet

#friend #apologise #couldn #alternative
Dear Emre, Hİ, how are you? I hope you doing very well.I am writing to let you know that I want to apologise
you
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 and I will not
come
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come to
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 the meeting,Because my
mother
 is very
sich
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sick
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 and she
stay
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is
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at
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in
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 hospital.I hope you will consider my situation positively immediately. Let me explain my situation I went home
of
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with
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 my
mother
last
 week and my
mother
 was
sich
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sad
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for
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because
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 all
medicine
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her medicine
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 is not
use
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used
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 after she needs
to
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apply
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help so I have to stay
her
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at her
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homes
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. My
mother
 was bad yesterday and we went
at
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to
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 hospital
for
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to
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 get treatment.
Doctor
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The doctor
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 and nurse take care
her
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of her
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.I was rest Would you kindly
meeting
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meet
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 me
please
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, please
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.
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 we want to meet in Big Cafe next week.I believe that
,
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apply
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 you can come for
meeting
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a meeting
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.
Moreover
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Moreover,
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 you are sure ,I missed you and my friend can come
in
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to
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cafe
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the cafe
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.Because ı want to chat together and
may be
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maybe
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we can drink tea or drink. Thank you for your consideration, Best regards, Ahmet
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single, clear idea and transitions smoothly to the next.
coherence cohesion
Consider a more structured and logical layout, with clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Include a suitable greeting and closing to maintain the format of a personal letter.
task achievement
Fully address all bullet points presented in the task with relevant details.
task achievement
Use an appropriate tone and register for a personal letter. Make sure the tone is consistent throughout.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Apologies, Regretfully, Unforeseen, Unavoidable, Commitment, Inconvenience, Remorseful
  • Reschedule, Propose, Flexibility, Accommodate, Enthusiasm
  • Looking forward, Sincerely, Best regards, Warm wishes, Catch up, Make it up to you, Make amends
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