Some people believe that when designing a building, the most important thing to be considered is the function rather than the outlook. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is an argument among societies about the importance of
focus
on design building based on the Wrong verb form
focusing
function
not
the exterior. These perspectives are based on Add the comma(s)
, not
the
Correct article usage
two
two-contradict
reasons, which are the main purpose of building and interested people, respectively. Correct your spelling
contrasting
In addition
, I personally agree with the former notion.
Fundamentally, the construction of almost all buildings are
taken into account Change the verb form
is
about
the main reason they built them, which is Change preposition
by
the
Change the word
their
function
. There are many types of building purpose
Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
such
as historical place
, Fix the agreement mistake
places
workplace
, shopping Fix the agreement mistake
workplaces
place
, and so on. Fix the agreement mistake
places
In addition
, if any building did not provide proper
place or things to support the Add an article
a proper
function
and only aimed to beautify the outlook, it would still miss the
value Change the word
its
of
Change preposition
apply
it
. Based on the mentioned explanation, it can be illustrated by HYBE building, Correct pronoun usage
apply
Correct article usage
a Korean's
Korean's
singer company, which Change noun form
Korean
constructed
Add a missing verb
was constructed
in
Change preposition
with
the
common look, but the interior Correct article usage
a
has
consisted of many rooms with their own facilities Unnecessary verb
apply
to
dance practice and work.
Contrariwise, Change preposition
for
other
Fix the agreement mistake
others
also
believed that the outside look also
played vital
role Add an article
a vital
to attract
public interest. Change preposition
in attracting
This
point of view is considered correct because majority
used to feel comfortable if they Correct article usage
the majority
deal
with attractive Wrong verb form
dealt
building
which associated with the outlook. Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
For instance
, Pisa Tower is just an unussual
tower in Italy, but still deal with tourist attraction Correct your spelling
unusual
due to
the
look. Despite Change the word
its
of
the historical thing, it Change preposition
apply
has
not have anything useful inside.
In conclusion, part of society who think that we need to focus on the Verb problem
does
function
is associated with their knowledge towards building main aim, but the other
argue differently because they are into the exterior Fix the agreement mistake
others
function
(to have people
interest). In regard to these, I remained optimistic Change noun form
people's
with
the main purpose of Change preposition
about
building
Add an article
the building
a building
is
Wrong verb form
being
constructed
.Replace the word
construction
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