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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
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The line graph above shows the
price
 of bananas (counted per kilogram in US$) from
Japan
, France, Germany and the USA from 1996 to 2004.
Overall
, it can be seen that
Japan
 had the highest banana
price
 per kilogram,
while
 the USA remained
as
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the country with the cheapest
price
 of
this
 fruit. In 1996, 1 kilogram of banana in
Japan
 was valued at US$2. The
price
 of
this
 fruit was raised by 50% in 1997 to US$3, before returned back to
original
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its original
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price
 in 1998. Between 4 years (1999-2002) the
price
were fluctuating
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fluctuated
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around
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 US$2 to US$2.5 and
then
 recorded its lowest
price
 of US$1.5 in 2003, before
rocketed
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 back to US$2.5 in 2004.
This
fluctuative
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fluctuating
fluctuation
price
 situation
also
 happened in France and in
the
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Germany, even though
market
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the market
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price
 was still below
Japan
.
On the contrary
, the market situation in the USA was totally different
compare
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compared
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 to the other three countries. The
price
 of
Banana
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bananas
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 in
this
 region was quite stable, with only around US$0.2
price
increased
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increase
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 from the period given.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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