Intelligent robots will be more widely used in the future. Is this a blessing or a curse? What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, artificial
intelligents
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intelligence

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are
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being
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famous and it will lead to
use
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intelligent
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of intelligent

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robots
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more widely in the future. In my
opinion
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it is
blessing
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in
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some
point
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of view because it will help
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for doing
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do

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and easier to
take
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make

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decision
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decisions

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based on
data
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that
robots
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provided
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. One of the
reason
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is a blessing,
the
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intelligent
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are made
for helping
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people
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doing
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specific
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. Especially, for
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who open
restaurant
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restaurants

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but they do not have enough employees. The intelligent robot will help them
while
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restaurant
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open
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like
delivery
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food to the customers or cleaning the table and the floor. Those special
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that
human
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can do but not many
people
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want to do it. As we know
people
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more tending
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to work in the office rather than clean the restaurant. Other reasons, most
of
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the
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intelligent
robots
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are created to populate and illustrate
data
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for
decisioning
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decision-making

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something. It is helpful
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people
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especially
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, especially

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for creating a quick decision.
For instance
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,
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who are working in drilling
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they
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need intelligent
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share
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all existing
data
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from existing and current
well
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such
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as what risks
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they will face during drilling and where the target prospect
.
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that already shared by intelligent
robots
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,
engineer
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will able to
have
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quick
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decision
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than used to be.
Compare
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with twenty years ago during drilling,
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had
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needed at least two days
for making
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the same decisions as the technology still not
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at that time.
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, in my opinion,
the
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intelligent
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are a blessing for
people
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but it is
also
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curse
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for some
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. It will lead some unemployment in the future because there will be some jobs that replaced by
robots
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and it already started now
such
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as
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and parking. I think for
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drawbacks,
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needs to have some regulations regarding the intelligent
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using
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in
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a big
scales
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,
people
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secure and safe about their jobs.
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,
the
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intelligent
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will be a blessing in the future because
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will help in
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's
life
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for
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and
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more efficient than before.
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, we need to
aware
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regarding
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the drawbacks that can replace
people
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on
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