The diagram below shows how instant noodiles are manufactured. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
This
diagram Linking Words
provide
the processing of Change the verb form
provides
noodles
in the factory basically starting from Use synonyms
flour
until Use synonyms
reach
packaging.
Correct subject-verb agreement
reaches
Overall
, we have Linking Words
Correct article usage
a totally
totally
Replace the word
total
eight
steps to preparing Change preposition
of eight
noodles
. Use synonyms
Linking Words
However
it Add a comma
However,
begging
as harvest Verb problem
begins
flour
and it Use synonyms
cross
into four minor steps before cooking and drying to get ready for selling Change the verb form
crosses
product
in proper packaging.
Correct article usage
the product
It is clear that
, Linking Words
firstly
there are two huge Linking Words
tube
for Storage silos which came from track as Change to a plural noun
tubes
flour
,
Use synonyms
Next
step, is adding water and oil Correct article usage
The next
in
Change preposition
to
container
of the mixture and putting on the rollers Correct article usage
the container
on
order to create the dough sheet which is Change preposition
in
smoothly
in appearance following, it will convert Change the word
smooth
them
into strips to get ready for making Correct pronoun usage
apply
noodles
discs in Use synonyms
circle
shape . In Add an article
a circle
heater
sink cooking the crop with oil. So far it Correct article usage
the heater
make
them Wrong verb form
has made
drying
.
Papering the Change the form of the verb
dry
arrange
cups into two paralleling Wrong verb form
arranged
line
adding the vegetables and spices. Change to a plural noun
lines
Linking Words
Whereas packaging
is the Correct word choice
Packaging
last
stage, it Linking Words
provided
the labelling and sealing of Wrong verb form
provides
this
product.
the Linking Words
noodles
as Use synonyms
flour
which carried in track.
Cooking by using oil Use synonyms
Linking Words
then
drying
Before labels packaging in the cupsCorrect word choice
and then
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